1) The carrot looks like it's on fire, maybe just try simple motion lines, not a motion blur effect, 2) That mark on Fluttershy's flank... is it to show wind? To show that she's moving? A finger smudge on the page? Please explain... I'm not a professional art critic and I'm not good at drawing at all, but you requested critiques, so... there.
Ahh, right, tears. Well, I'm sure making them blue- despite not being realistic- would make them appear more... tear-like. I look forward to the finished version; it already looks pretty good! Way better than anything I could do, haha! I'll stick to writing, eh?
2) That mark on Fluttershy's flank... is it to show wind? To show that she's moving? A finger smudge on the page? Please explain...
I'm not a professional art critic and I'm not good at drawing at all, but you requested critiques, so... there.
2) I'm trying to add tears. It'll probably look better once I've fixed the stylistic stuff, but it's useful to hear that it's not reading well.
I look forward to the finished version; it already looks pretty good! Way better than anything I could do, haha!
I'll stick to writing, eh?
I'm not a professional artist, so others will have to advise you.
Hehh I liked the episode though. Angel needs to be spanked sometimes.